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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!$ y# [' `* s/ B

9 O* b8 s( r# |0 A- ]# A4 f9 VIn the garden of my heart, M$ K- ^, _! S/ O; W" y# A$ F2 g
You planted a tree; f  B2 m, o4 J: q% h
From sunset til dawn% n. z; e8 A9 O
Through darkness to light# F! V) O& t- }. @0 \; I4 \) k+ v
Nourished with my soul
3 _- H) B; m# s7 t; mDevoured my sorrow by thee
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2 w6 b5 X6 s/ I% iIn the memory of my life% S( R: k5 H9 j" U
You planted a dream
7 X  e! X. i3 [2 x1 fShould the sky fall down on me
5 q' c' V: v7 e1 U4 `May promises fade in the sea0 l8 [" p! H3 \
Sewing back every broken pieces- j8 M) f- G0 J; q: X
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表2 k% z7 U% N. N, e6 y
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart
2 V- Z7 j; k  ]: qYou planted a tree9 [. |- o* C/ ~: U6 y3 O  U! y
From sunset til dawn
7 |" a* x0 v- c/ u: g( S  oThrough darkness to light
5 P/ W3 @; I  m9 O3 bNourished with my soul) I7 W3 G$ P) r1 H% ?" [! Y
Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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; r8 n0 w- A. S2 c4 Y' D写得真好。! J$ ^# Y; Y- u7 t- z/ q8 {
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加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表* A5 d1 R1 ?: Y. a- j: L. B
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?) E% x7 e! Z5 i  `
写得真好。
2 L* D( ]" s# J3 `( C/ ^6 p加精加精!

9 \  ^- Y& `: C! O7 Y# |我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
/ r/ g0 P( Q7 e/ m, z如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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$ R; k/ V6 @) B, R7 n! Z; kSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
1 M/ J4 j; |" _# qShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.1 f  [4 r; @' n3 D
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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2 T; E, C' l! x1 C6 e& ?Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.7 M. s6 Z6 P3 R; K

' c) e$ }; W* A$ l, `9 `, N1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
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红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表3 z' N! B5 A6 v  I
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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# U- E) s0 Q  x: _3 xShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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1 ?  V( t# R! p1 A& e; t诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
7 i  h; o' `  g3 Ethee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。) @- Y6 g+ k/ }) f. ^, B2 S* u
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊,有很多经典的例子。
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/ b1 \+ F/ J; B( r2 s$ B4 v+ u比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》/ M6 }, ^! H" _, h

  R* G* ?. Y5 b  p& q4 b1 k! k4 _Don't weep at my grave
9 d% A* |. c4 ]( D$ Z( YFor I am not there,
' B$ Z( ?. o$ A" D2 C8 kI've a date with a butterfly
  z+ O& Y  a$ H3 i1 PTo dance on the air.+ \4 w0 `3 H  w2 U1 J7 _: z/ J
If I'm missed, find a flower,; Q! V3 M) p8 ]( J
I'll be there too,: w. J' V+ N4 Z
Sniffing it's fragrance
5 f$ X5 ?& I( }4 {Right next to you.
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' p, Q+ g6 z. \- U) HDon't be sad
# U& m  [3 z* E7 g7 p8 G3 }When you remember me,5 r' m5 B6 r6 \
For I'm singing in the sunshine,6 ]& A6 T5 k: n
Wild and free,
" J0 o' k$ q' o0 i# DFlirting with the lighting,8 ?; s. c+ m, @- e* R! m
Playing tag with the wind,
2 G1 s6 m6 m9 x; h/ @& R! H/ a7 |5 kChasing the thunder$ G- d3 M9 K( O2 I0 o- m" S
Time and again,/ g( b8 V9 L3 q+ D+ \
Soaring with the eagle,
7 R- S% k: j6 l# h8 jSwimming in the sea,5 W3 }0 p' y, V5 I! s
Enjoying all of nature
$ O6 P1 a! j% Z" \+ H1 [: jWhile I'm waiting for thee.
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