In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
6 Q1 K& s* G$ DNourished with my soul
' M5 A* [, z5 R; {% Y: _$ N" t/ vDevoured my sorrow by thee

In the memory of my life
' i  Q0 `4 n& y5 @. [: A$ r- BYou planted a dream
1 h. @" m8 G1 N2 c! ^Should the sky fall down on me
  P* {% a! ~# Q( c3 f6 P9 H+ PMay promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
) A" H9 j5 k2 z3 e3 F/ BBursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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9 C: t! p  H1 qIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

写得真好。

2 p/ i4 g" M6 O' [- o, v. a- E加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
3 D9 g0 k' l& [$ i6 s眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
  I0 u  \9 r; P5 o* q6 c写得真好。
加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

7 N% P0 a# g+ n, Y- z; u/ N五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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/ d# K8 r# |, C! f; W! PThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.

. _# ^0 b& G! j9 d1 }7 F# [  ~$ B1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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0 F7 J. g- X8 f7 p& w+ w1 P7 w+ t2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
# S! S2 c% k/ f' L* lthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

2 ~7 m8 h% u% w) L" E8 X% _2 f6 i诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
% \5 G3 _  r5 x, @thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

* x" o+ \" t/ w4 f/ ?2 M; y4 B0 ]Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave
# l/ z/ K- D4 HFor I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
; j1 v$ @$ f( D- BIf I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
6 ?: H9 e, Z, x7 Q( ~( y" ySniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.

' v! \) R' D' ]Don't be sad
When you remember me,
+ g  `( y$ @2 MFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
, c& G% H' Y; ?3 k" Z& m% e8 kFlirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
* v& \& h0 p+ b7 {3 H- cTime and again,
" I- ~: V  N8 w9 g0 O3 g$ s, eSoaring with the eagle,
& J# G& g6 P4 m* T- jSwimming in the sea,
, i' `: s& ^" ]; D; zEnjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.