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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart
1 l5 t6 E8 x6 [0 r" ?& R8 c/ qYou planted a tree6 K+ U9 j9 O  m4 L" B0 g
From sunset til dawn
& n# u' X& G$ _Through darkness to light
& M5 D! o1 _2 a: g: b* t7 q( B$ VNourished with my soul
% [  P9 T- n, gDevoured my sorrow by thee) Y9 z6 G. C' S1 g; l

7 u7 d: d/ m  A8 l! [$ SIn the memory of my life
4 x8 d- j, N4 u& ]You planted a dream' x( N, \' Y: [
Should the sky fall down on me
; c0 `) F' s, s: j1 UMay promises fade in the sea& v. v. f# N8 }
Sewing back every broken pieces
4 O6 K: f) u  V5 _Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
4 z3 g2 O* x/ W0 I$ {  D听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart
" w8 K/ C1 g' o: MYou planted a tree
! _# {9 p# G. g( }7 u! L; tFrom sunset til dawn
3 z: z1 k  X/ ]8 wThrough darkness to light
) R8 @# }* j& F9 X. t' B/ R0 _2 yNourished with my soul
" x( k3 u# z& x9 IDevoured my so ...

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( T0 i# @) f" x3 q$ Z* @# D. w! m眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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写得真好。$ T5 Q6 y" o- ~  V2 b+ j

( W/ y' V' C' `, l加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表: U, g: C: h0 j3 E: S! p
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
/ E' ~% [& ]5 i  ^写得真好。/ F3 x6 @* q, D4 v' S, s! [4 L8 ^
加精加精!

8 e7 X8 ?, d/ K  P' T6 F7 F我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
* z. t( p, e! D2 R! p7 |如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表( s2 I4 Y! V2 I0 |0 |" w
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.- C7 J& Z) C" g$ t/ l2 C

1 T0 O, V0 @- n* M! D( ASewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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5 S3 N6 l1 ^1 |+ X- n8 K' n' yThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".+ ?! z6 I4 r; X+ V* Z
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。2 h7 j5 o0 |5 Y8 i' D4 _

% N6 s* D% N' Y: m4 N5 gShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表. f/ y3 ~% a( ~& Q- V
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。: c- L, A; Y2 o# _

' u  F/ a7 g5 D$ `1 Q3 JShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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  Q) Z. {6 C  d+ e: R诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
4 [3 ^8 H- o5 M- m8 pthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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) E! }8 \4 ?+ z( n/ N' kShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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有啊,有很多经典的例子。! w$ `' H- I  @- y( Y4 n0 z

" E9 Z' K& T- f* u  v5 T比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave
* l$ h# E) X& [For I am not there,
& L- a0 `6 z8 ^1 lI've a date with a butterfly+ O, \% f+ Z/ C9 N3 H# z
To dance on the air.
/ t3 T# P; h1 I9 R: aIf I'm missed, find a flower,9 v/ Z# a5 J: U7 Q) C# B" w. V$ y( P
I'll be there too,+ h4 p# m& P5 Q! R" l7 m8 U2 A7 |
Sniffing it's fragrance
5 c- B" w2 [/ S& oRight next to you.! I: w4 {% T* l& G1 a6 q; _

, Q' q1 S; d- t7 ~" {Don't be sad
% C9 T# X6 b5 s% X- pWhen you remember me,
( P" \, G9 q1 mFor I'm singing in the sunshine,  a* R5 N: \2 T" C5 x+ C
Wild and free,
, \. c1 J8 u6 t( jFlirting with the lighting,
  q/ h2 l! W) Z% S' ]3 }Playing tag with the wind,! z2 F" x; [7 p0 a$ e5 W
Chasing the thunder; D( u# l) a! q, B5 ?  p9 G/ c9 a; I
Time and again,; s/ B' G7 g2 O# Y: x& H2 E) J
Soaring with the eagle,
8 j) W) m  S! Z8 }/ d  bSwimming in the sea,. W( u. m, D- k
Enjoying all of nature
5 Q/ |! T; O4 {5 j4 I7 {While I'm waiting for thee.
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