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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!1 A4 W% I2 q; R. \* c; ^$ k& l

, W7 q  n# [9 m0 ZIn the garden of my heart% @0 U* U$ a& X( ^) B" w1 C
You planted a tree  ?' s! T, l/ R3 C6 l* ]
From sunset til dawn2 z0 U2 E8 q8 \) ~# J7 o5 L
Through darkness to light+ U' r" x5 S) J6 `! x, L% Z
Nourished with my soul
* d% D3 d4 D0 v2 jDevoured my sorrow by thee7 b3 P- K9 y# Q2 Y# o
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In the memory of my life4 e0 l' M6 N- C
You planted a dream+ j( v% g2 D) j9 }( L$ n* k
Should the sky fall down on me( k2 ]; I1 E5 i/ B/ n( M) d  S" e+ O
May promises fade in the sea0 g% ~3 e4 ^. X8 U( ^. s* b% p
Sewing back every broken pieces' i! l+ L& }3 x1 {4 t* q
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表& x- v) U0 U; {* v, J) s# p6 Z
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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3 D' |2 W3 b. f! _1 o' K7 wIn the garden of my heart
4 C! `7 @& z* t: q* rYou planted a tree
; r/ ?4 v  Q+ vFrom sunset til dawn' L: m1 J/ C( B) j7 R4 r$ f4 ]
Through darkness to light
0 s7 s6 Y' q7 W- |9 e! s* ]* cNourished with my soul
0 f, A5 W5 ]! J# |0 ADevoured my so ...
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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?( z6 k" i" }" ?9 e

6 h, W/ t" c4 k5 u; V写得真好。
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加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表+ v4 u/ O6 x$ ]+ l9 r# F$ I5 _
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?  Y& {$ z7 c& w; d0 i! x- a9 _7 i
写得真好。' Z4 ^& r, e( v# F
加精加精!
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
( r0 m- a2 |# @+ S如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.: b  ]6 o3 L* g; X

6 M8 c  }2 B% z$ U" jSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
$ P2 c/ T! A" i  Z$ r8 ?Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.  {6 _+ c' H: Y; m: a! Q0 m
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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0 c7 Y, P. ~  P, ^: ?& mThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.9 E* i; v- d! |& s9 M0 Q
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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6 X7 i( V7 a: ]2 d. d5 y) \2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
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红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表$ d; i, h% Q. E- c3 `
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表  j) o$ f  {! M5 D! A( s, Y0 _
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。, P  z; G+ J* M# v. y

* I6 R7 K- A$ T6 e% {Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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; x7 s* J: m' O5 P5 s1 X有啊,有很多经典的例子。( ]+ K# w9 f) r0 Q! b6 K" R
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave3 ~( |& Z- q! V  r+ L# d5 E
For I am not there,
) w* W8 q0 N* K+ F3 [4 W* m0 FI've a date with a butterfly
# y; Y: _) M# tTo dance on the air.
) }" E! Q, i, c0 ?) L3 Z' BIf I'm missed, find a flower,. o0 p; D7 R& {1 d) T
I'll be there too," N7 ~7 Z% L+ ^0 B) G6 J
Sniffing it's fragrance
9 n# P7 z: z8 W8 O. F( vRight next to you.
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4 x% s; P1 `9 |Don't be sad# Q/ Q/ T' X! }5 q, t
When you remember me,% o9 Z/ L: b" F  c, L  o
For I'm singing in the sunshine,7 C. E! ~  K3 h- U
Wild and free,3 f" n9 Q9 d! |( q' a3 |2 J
Flirting with the lighting,- Q' y+ |0 T- X% P3 r* t+ V
Playing tag with the wind,9 p" t; P+ P1 q' U/ b' v- h9 Z- K5 o
Chasing the thunder% [6 n( R+ E" @3 ]
Time and again,% g) N: O# N" l7 Z* I+ \3 H
Soaring with the eagle,2 K/ _' r! E, p( D  N; o1 `
Swimming in the sea,
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While I'm waiting for thee.
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