我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川
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0 `1 O$ Q- [3 |3 Z9 u9 z2 c3 H我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
唯一的元老
  F. Q8 S) [5 S- O9 ?一住三十多年
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邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
1 u( P7 N' r1 S9 H白发红颜  不见皱纹
) C6 M+ Z5 S- V) r+ N开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物
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  _( a! R" h+ ?头顶英国文学硕士的光环
$ L! V: t5 {* K$ T邻居气宇轩昂
7 {* ^9 }: g9 W- C( S如同女面朱熔基
4 d  u8 I9 V' R7 {& X, v% `' i( ~% ]邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

) c) Z0 O, Y( ^5 _英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
: W. h: m) y9 v$ m+ `# otens of townhouse condos.

( P8 j' S+ z+ t/ ^% \4 N, ?6 @7 [1 a: n# eNeighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
$ a" J& G( ^! @) `- VShe has white hairs and red faces.
3 B) q8 V0 ^1 U9 L: Y0 s+ K5 MHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

She shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
* |2 T/ H/ L; P) i8 _) }. o% G7 ?she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
+ L2 j: U( a- E5 u6 P! @. Das if she did not know what years mean.
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" X: v. h) G5 \2 x: `, b; uWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
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Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
2 ~6 |% _; e. A4 B; Q+ `Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
4 Y3 I( ^  n6 X, Y& ?" B9 H/ z5 C- fthat is the sole sound going into my ears
% ~/ c4 U! [/ |* s; U) gfrom the next side of my wall;
the unknown tune is extolling
1 ^8 G% y" \: A( s  B5 _/ Othe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
- l% S: f: C3 |2 Gagain and again.

Justing

& J# S! C5 [4 g5 d0 P% t$ N2 K土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

. Q) h; s4 w5 f# Z从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
; w* C$ o; N: ~1 kHer light-footed movement
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修改为：
" p4 n% |% i! J% b# f2 \Her light-footed movement
( D2 B, {. z% ]0 _0 f5 U( V: m7 V" A0 cis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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Justing

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6# Justing
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hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。