In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
% z; e+ C0 W4 Y7 N7 R- H0 rFrom sunset til dawn
' B- D0 v' `! X' H& EThrough darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

# o7 b  b" f5 Z! ?% z  MIn the memory of my life
You planted a dream
/ t4 y: A5 z7 o2 z* A" D* y: |Should the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
4 L7 T" r& _! t2 W1 f0 TSewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

7 w& m/ C& P) LIn the garden of my heart
6 g$ ?3 d( }& {4 V0 `You planted a tree
! Y' h2 |5 T0 a; E3 y) AFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
% M% `4 u1 c' ^( o3 i) h8 I9 T1 PNourished with my soul
( z8 E9 O8 O6 o# v5 LDevoured my so ...

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) n# O% ~' |) R眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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- _9 h% t0 y7 ^' V! P' w写得真好。

" N3 r, \& h/ L/ Y; i" {加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
# K. Z! N3 R; p眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
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- T1 u' t- J: c我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

5 g5 i; H" G! C: cSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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5 V  j5 J) ~+ u4 A" ]0 M! G( i* d1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
6 e" Q. h' G4 G& B8 Hthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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) N' z" }, M3 ^6 z) tShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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: ^9 K) `; {' q+ fShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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% u" M+ e; ?& z' k有啊，有很多经典的例子。

6 d- P( k& F9 ]( J比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

8 ?( r2 Z: E0 K3 G& l# I( VDon't weep at my grave
8 c3 {- l* \0 u3 n# n' E7 }For I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
% y! @. w# Y& ^# h2 v3 `If I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
7 P8 t& U$ |( wSniffing it's fragrance
( Y6 J. Q9 i4 k$ S, I# yRight next to you.
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$ @7 E; Z* f9 q) QDon't be sad
) h' |4 T0 r5 ZWhen you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
+ I' C2 d/ }0 f% t# z: fFlirting with the lighting,
9 Z1 z- X2 b* d+ D/ K. HPlaying tag with the wind,
# b( y: O2 l& Z1 n1 D2 eChasing the thunder
. D  d/ @9 b" w0 xTime and again,
% ^7 o: g) @8 K+ I9 E+ _Soaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
$ s" X6 ]# U3 f( q% aEnjoying all of nature
6 j1 l  l, S. K+ KWhile I'm waiting for thee.