In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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, Q7 i% N& t! W& Z5 EIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
" n1 Y  b( E8 h: GFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
7 l6 o- w* j( {, G/ a7 nDevoured my sorrow by thee
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In the memory of my life
& u+ ^  ~+ c, }9 D3 _# k2 [You planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
1 R$ H0 _8 M- D- i. }+ AMay promises fade in the sea
3 }" R7 n8 b% t6 [- b2 r: {2 ], YSewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
, M6 R9 s* v/ V3 y. v2 v听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
9 b2 g4 w" A& A6 ^8 uYou planted a tree
. C. i0 F, l! U1 i; J$ L# G/ ^From sunset til dawn
- G/ `3 P. g( `& u5 c9 rThrough darkness to light
' H3 ]: ~6 ^3 y/ E7 i+ BNourished with my soul
# l: A  ~! U& g6 I' u4 sDevoured my so ...

& k, p5 d. [8 a( C* b( E/ m% _
  L- X) n. Q: D2 g2 A% \$ m/ ^  ~; V眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

5 u+ L( N, c" T, s) t8 N* j写得真好。

加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
- S& _* v3 L. Q" L( a' y5 X/ O$ H眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
  P2 G2 S  \. {/ F加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
- t7 Q+ [% n2 |/ D( }如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

/ d2 E$ @/ }( ], u5 O9 v' H4 D) e, aSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
! w5 L: A( _+ T* WShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.

1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
& B, x: J# G) ?" p: e0 Qthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

( |, N& t6 H3 ?0 ]: Q! wShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

5 y  U# T+ q4 Q; ~诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
+ f/ h" z- ?4 R4 R: l& e% Nthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

$ m' C- n4 T* n8 J, n9 E" S. E' uShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊，有很多经典的例子。

; Y5 d- I( L) D$ r比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

Don't weep at my grave
* R+ H. a% r; s( Q$ mFor I am not there,
6 k; I$ c2 n+ F! C' V2 N. LI've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
& z+ s  R; N$ uSniffing it's fragrance
% t! f4 g  A1 E4 P$ }Right next to you.

Don't be sad
When you remember me,
  Z/ ~. j3 B4 ^0 A$ jFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
' d) V2 r  X; A7 b/ w, M" B2 \$ R2 @Flirting with the lighting,
& H- n  y% r3 U! ~/ U. P( n4 Q+ {Playing tag with the wind,
& h/ T. s6 y9 G  Q' EChasing the thunder
Time and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
4 k* Q' L' \5 P( `Swimming in the sea,
- R6 Y; e9 I2 [! r* eEnjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.