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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart5 s! L5 w0 l4 t: Z' D) v, s
You planted a tree
/ V7 P3 f9 P; AFrom sunset til dawn" g; e  P. [( }5 B) \) c2 B/ h
Through darkness to light$ w0 H6 l; {$ {0 K
Nourished with my soul
7 }' ~+ N, g# I% s# {/ [& EDevoured my sorrow by thee
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, S: b' m4 k/ k) f8 I, f3 }+ JIn the memory of my life* y) |2 S) s' ^
You planted a dream7 B% Q+ ?, O* J2 ?8 Y) F# G/ w3 _
Should the sky fall down on me
+ w7 k: G" }( u/ r. d$ i, U$ v8 CMay promises fade in the sea' N6 B0 l( d" j  f
Sewing back every broken pieces) ?% ^7 n8 K# ^, v1 }+ d9 ~6 f% _
Bursting the love out of me$ m* _2 O  ]6 K9 e3 T$ S

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
% m: g0 T8 `2 i/ @6 i听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!' Z6 u$ T& P+ B( Y' o

9 r+ ]( n6 k7 e$ K0 L5 yIn the garden of my heart5 d/ i( _* I' L/ h$ l' n; Z7 W
You planted a tree0 s9 G& q8 ~6 A' M4 L" S8 l" e+ @* Q
From sunset til dawn) ^, U, p/ L6 h% a) ?* a3 `
Through darkness to light
% Q1 P& D, Z. R4 bNourished with my soul: k% h- ?, R/ E* B' z+ L
Devoured my so ...
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/ S- |3 K, p& [& p& T9 O" v7 r眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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) y# R1 R+ }6 @9 l) C写得真好。
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加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
2 k- ^* t% `; G, ^3 h眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?3 G& f& U; M+ I; g
写得真好。- H: C$ C* o$ N( ~6 b
加精加精!
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
1 p& @, x5 c" c" W如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.% c* V+ x( v- U" q3 N5 e! L

& A% J& s5 E6 {9 B. I! t8 Q$ VSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
6 X0 e( s2 V" V" N; lShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.. y, v5 b& `# h# c7 N
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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0 D$ a3 U0 U$ O: |! v$ H2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。) Z8 }% I' r/ C# N* d7 O
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表3 }2 A: R& W4 `/ L6 L
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。! M2 Z- ]+ J  ?9 N7 q1 J# I$ o  z# z

% y$ ?; X' @* \5 r9 S) ?Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表& y) u4 s7 y& q5 r, ^
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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3 H+ j" d1 `0 s1 N$ a# @有啊,有很多经典的例子。4 V' a8 B9 Y, V5 q
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》) E" q# J, U5 a9 W) v+ p- I

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For I am not there,  s. K: |. v% K2 N; w
I've a date with a butterfly
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If I'm missed, find a flower,8 X( k) C1 a7 W, c8 g; T0 w
I'll be there too,
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Right next to you.  C. `7 f( G' k% O' v

7 S  w. u/ V, f" D4 t( }Don't be sad
. b6 k# G, T  p3 JWhen you remember me,7 ]4 s; ^/ Y( L5 b* K
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
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. }. g3 R7 |7 S( k" u) YFlirting with the lighting,, m- m. C5 o3 n5 {8 P
Playing tag with the wind,
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Time and again,6 Q" {' k4 X  ]/ h" M" f
Soaring with the eagle,6 q1 s% ?! z* K1 s1 W$ [  H, p
Swimming in the sea,
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