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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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2 ^% W7 S; n6 R$ e3 @9 [, `In the garden of my heart! P* p0 X3 F9 e0 y2 a8 z5 U
You planted a tree
3 s# h# l4 l8 Y4 R. EFrom sunset til dawn
5 G3 {& l; ^0 K2 Q0 t. sThrough darkness to light
8 I9 @2 p9 F0 d" Q7 ENourished with my soul
  L5 ?( U2 V4 V6 s) o% B4 D, _9 _( aDevoured my sorrow by thee1 h2 \2 B9 C1 w; @* t
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In the memory of my life
2 [9 N( o8 `3 @You planted a dream+ {! ~& E1 O! j( l" D' D
Should the sky fall down on me
0 z8 ~! Q1 X5 `May promises fade in the sea
5 Q1 S" [" l8 p8 S" g5 j  tSewing back every broken pieces4 z# P$ _+ i% a0 \( Q6 [$ r. |
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
. }9 V3 J( H+ T! A( I! W听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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0 R# |% ?- N  M, I/ y$ zIn the garden of my heart
0 e3 {  U# u, D# F0 BYou planted a tree3 L! W4 \: t: ?( z* m9 ^. K
From sunset til dawn' L( O# X; d" f9 b! M
Through darkness to light
7 q( X0 C: U( b; ]8 nNourished with my soul$ e6 _+ k0 e& E3 E8 ?. F, o2 @$ _0 g
Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?: C9 `+ g* F; |* T) }8 {
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写得真好。
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加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表& v" K6 x( F! g* K
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
" p5 v# m, @2 r' n写得真好。& a$ B/ j/ M! v, O* g
加精加精!

$ v, z. t  x$ f" b, G我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
$ _2 I: {. s; k如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

8 ?9 K7 o9 L+ X9 r7 q$ ~五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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( E6 D( L! P: q, ], ?" t7 r5 n" iThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.' h9 ^1 Y, \0 p2 u3 n; b4 g

. R$ X$ E+ i. @* [5 u4 }/ S1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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7 q7 o9 h  p5 v+ Y. Y+ ~& p- P! R2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
# H! i* ~: p: L3 Bthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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# ]4 J1 O2 G; c( fShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
- V& `& F9 r* s4 h) k6 R. W' G. U" uthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。5 M2 @: E0 b7 \" w5 k. |  l: Y

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有啊,有很多经典的例子。9 t* ]* \) M# o/ a( }* P% f

3 X7 b* `9 `0 H- w- ~5 S+ W  h比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》9 c3 L9 h8 D5 K1 ], E; |. @. e" @, O

$ J3 e! c3 Y; |Don't weep at my grave
0 k3 x* d4 O* r* b! PFor I am not there,
5 Q3 A8 r1 h" G4 j" R' l4 nI've a date with a butterfly
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If I'm missed, find a flower,' }- [. \. B  E* R' l
I'll be there too,- q6 l) v8 a, v2 R" A7 }; b7 C
Sniffing it's fragrance9 D: T! \7 Q% t
Right next to you.! X6 N% k7 h8 k# @& x5 Y/ r' ?  O

9 P; p! h' u+ h6 ~- J$ g) `7 P6 LDon't be sad
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For I'm singing in the sunshine,2 |1 J) o' z3 W4 m6 _3 g7 U/ W
Wild and free,
2 b5 Q3 j" z- d' l( EFlirting with the lighting,. F9 A9 I; I3 d# r
Playing tag with the wind,; I' }! S9 Z$ {: D" c; y
Chasing the thunder
; w8 e1 Z/ v. H( B+ H5 XTime and again,
4 f' \8 ?. [1 v! T' t6 m& x! kSoaring with the eagle,
' f& c2 _$ P. oSwimming in the sea,
# Z: I# K0 p( D- `) BEnjoying all of nature/ w1 _/ W; J/ t. W( [
While I'm waiting for thee.
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