我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
) L- t2 p/ H" @3 ^唯一的元老
; ^) l1 `) ~; K" {- |一住三十多年

9 _# w- x8 ~5 ?" N邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
$ `, a6 O: c& e, w6 Q3 s+ ~白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

/ G' E  c$ N" f& T头顶英国文学硕士的光环
, M: ^9 |2 m! N- z7 X邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
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4 u" e) E6 w/ W* N3 i则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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0 x7 |) m$ ]) ]# T' i" F1 x; Q邻居酷喜中国文化
5 [: l) o9 |/ {% S6 Y说她属土龙
; V3 j- ^/ h' d8 |2 p: V其笛声也悠扬
8 |: s, i* W6 N- ^2 _8 j那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
3 O6 h5 s( z- p" u( ~, n: S( l5 v那不知名的曲调
% Y5 R, e& v0 [  J6 O& v5 C反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

英文版，欢迎指正：
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; Y9 W8 l0 {4 a7 d% Z3 d8 zLiving here for more than thirty years,
my prestigous neighbour
  s0 |! A3 s& b( [is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
5 g, W. F% f& }: y7 u; `She has white hairs and red faces.
Her light-footed movement
& m( h+ A) K2 A4 W( Q; Uis just like a flying swallow.
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1 V  ^- ?) `6 x- h1 sShe shovels the snow on her door lane
. y% j! W: N- ^0 `, j! Nbefore driving her own car;
she digs her back yard
- S7 t9 u8 a2 _! ~to plant flowers ---
( \# p6 Q# s2 a/ i+ M% e4 ras if she did not know what years mean.
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1 u( R& B# ]3 bWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
* ~) g2 B) Q! N0 I. P- c# O: cShe said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
& E; H. M' C  i5 |5 m, d( fWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
* X0 x* D3 P# h% }that is the sole sound going into my ears
# n4 B( f4 S/ @' y+ Z- N1 ]from the next side of my wall;
! l5 O/ P1 r/ w) z6 qthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
. ]* H0 r, {6 W! k! c7 p6 kagain and again.

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( j7 V/ O: I% [6 G: l土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
Justing 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
Her light-footed movement
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修改为：
Her light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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! h$ h3 }- ]& }- h, ?2 O% Phm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

4 y- K0 n) j7 l3 s' Z4 S! d我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。