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  1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level. 2 Z% Z6 S# a/ _

" F" d$ P6 G3 i" R2 _  改进:Artists' work upgrades our civilization. 0 ?1 i6 m* F% c/ [$ K) X. Y' a$ y

6 j% @7 B9 }: a% ~! Y: O( T  2. For example, you work in a big factory.
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  改进: Suppose you work in a big factory. ' i( r7 l, I: w, {  J! Y

* _6 v- t0 F- C  3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job. 1 t% n! m' o" j( O

4 ~- i" e3 c; D' p8 e  改进:You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.
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, l& f+ O+ S3 O6 |) I& f( ?5 ?  4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck.
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  改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck. ' F* [2 ?9 G# N* {

, {; |' c' g$ }  5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level. ! o: s( v+ B" _2 d+ D) ?) p/ p8 S
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  改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life. # |5 r9 K1 R9 `8 B
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  6. Their brain is still very young.
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3 a/ w' T1 p/ f: z# N, h- s! H; n  改进: They are still immature.
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& ~/ A" B/ g8 t; ~$ y  7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things. - V; E# ?; o+ `7 j* B! R& g8 ~5 z

9 i3 N% S- F2 n" u- z' K  改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.
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8 }  C4 X0 ?5 e9 B( u  8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong. 3 {% [( i3 _3 w8 X# j  N+ d
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  改进: They cannot tell right from wrong. * q8 y( Y8 @/ H/ P' L! W2 c9 ~
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  9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time. 0 ~0 {3 C8 S6 i  t8 V/ }: ^  w
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  改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time.
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  10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life.
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, U- M# h( |4 n" ]  改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it. ) @6 n+ h/ ~) b
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  11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development.
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  改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development. 8 n$ _3 d5 ?/ w3 e" f

. M- |! X- T) D' \# t  12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money. ! V# r8 n. Z1 f: U' @/ n9 L5 L

5 ~2 ~/ Q( V/ _: e# e. c  改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money.
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+ g9 E- e3 C9 X" c$ k4 v  13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life.
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0 H3 u: e" K6 p1 s3 p  改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one.
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  14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money.   |' ?& V2 K& V0 v; I

: {) H) ?/ K3 u% o  [/ E  改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more. - d6 h1 m7 q. Z! z3 [" ?

  [' I; e$ a% T; M" N  15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products.
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  改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products. ) x" D* r( G9 b- @1 z! P& z

7 r$ H, |2 d( N2 A- X* X' F  16. In order to suit the needs of entering into work, students must grasp some technical skills.
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1 ^5 l+ ~) x( P8 v: ~: I  改进: In order to meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills. 6 }2 D2 B. @  b
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  17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians. 7 {* W- S& ]% V
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  改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand.
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4 E8 f; ^" Q! J. E9 B! t  18. This knowledge will become a part of your body.
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5 O' x; |8 V. l# _6 f  改进: This knowledge will become part of you.
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1 T/ ~3 D! L, L  R. C. i! S1 U  19. They cannot think clearly.
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9 b, j" U' U1 P  改进: They cannot think straight. ; ^) _  k$ S3 l+ Z8 q
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  20. Money can improve their living standard.
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  改进: Money can improve their life.
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  21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money. , o, F$ Z' B' r5 F5 C

7 Q* Y8 u' v, \) U- k1 _+ n  改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money. " a  p- t* d' I6 a2 t4 Q  W

0 e9 F' P5 K/ C  22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life.
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3 _: D& k  ]* m4 ~* ?9 b  改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life.
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  23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later.
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  改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn. 6 l0 B- _7 ?9 I  O

- `* V& n! M/ v4 J/ }  24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano. * F; o9 |4 T" R$ C7 p
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  25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion, I will study with others.   x- r9 Z$ N7 u
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  改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others. ; C8 Z9 r9 m6 s+ d1 c% }
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  26. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing. . j' Z, z0 A! \$ ~

' |" H, w; F& D  B7 U; U. W- y0 Q  改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal. % R6 p( f6 T! H6 ~7 q; |
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  27. Smoking can help you relax your mind.
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  改进: Cigarettes can help you relax.
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  28. What's about nonsmokers?   s3 i( ~3 T" R
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  改进: What about nonsmokers?
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  29. Why not to be a non-smoker?
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* r1 d3 g4 N" V2 ~! E5 d! x  改进: Why not be a non-smoker?
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1 f% s) k& a/ b6 C6 A4 O4 l  30. Everyone will have many friends in his life.
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& l% C! l0 c( C0 `; T3 N! U) V  改进: Everyone has friends in his life. 6 K8 M" h( O7 t
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  31. I am not good at maths, but English
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  改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English. ( K; }, ?& i1 s$ X3 @  W& ?
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  32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time?
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  改进: Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time?
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  33.It is children who clear about their interests. 8 I$ E. x( ]: a) G  p* F" s

" U2 u5 {5 q. L5 M" v' P  改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.
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  34. I agree the latter idea.
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  改进: I agree with the latter idea.
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' v9 S" F) C. x- D4 o' }3 ^% I# L  35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo. . O  N, i, q% X

+ ^. U  X+ c9 r8 a4 q  改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
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5 W+ F/ \' W: v2 {: {1 J7 n  36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now. ! M. o" H* S' I5 ~9 s/ q
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  改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.
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9 ^) o% K+ W( L1 K  37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.
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  改进:People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn. ) M6 c' M, q$ P" a6 x
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  38. No one knows all the things. ( n( M1 u# A3 E4 `" B
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  改进: No one knows everything.
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  39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life. ' U* N( Q5 n; L- o  B* v
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  改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
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0 _7 {- A* o- N& |1 G( K7 C  40. Each form of having friends has its advantages
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( r: Q1 w6 L0 X) Y% O9 k) D  改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages. # J; g4 b% D' @7 }+ {3 |3 ?. X

+ J4 y: L' F) ]7 f1 j# U  41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up.
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  改进: I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply
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4 Y- L# i8 R& b. ?8 f. I. z1 ]5 `$ b( ]  42. Luckily, he recognized an American professor. - D+ Z, o7 @' M7 ^
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  改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor.   u! X- w' \; I$ b
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  43. They will learn the bad habits.
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) s& q. n& U2 W8 k. a! h& _  改进: They will develop bad habits. ) l# h+ b9 }. K: I

  X! c! d. g5 _! j3 k6 W  44. In this continued process, people make progress. ! p2 C2 L! Q4 i( a

* z2 q6 A2 S; M# [% c  改进: In this cycle, people make progress. ( H( c1 G. X% G$ r5 ]4 i( }' w7 l
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  45. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary.
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  改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary.
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  46. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency.
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. K& a$ y6 O' H& n) ]+ l# |0 U  改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings.
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  h" W* A+ B9 a0 D  47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact.
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! n5 a! ]9 q! F7 J2 w8 H# U  改进: A wrong decision will bring even worse result. ) j9 O. M3 l* c/ }/ T, S( J

( I( w8 j3 i: e7 t7 U& j7 n" K  48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing.
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7 }9 g" `1 [* z% S. e9 i  改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream. $ `* D1 {8 T: |( i- U7 ~( U) @, K. j8 F

8 o: _9 y; \- L' B  c% Z8 N% K  V7 w  49. Children should be taught disciplines in order to avoid unnecessary lost. 9 d+ T1 }- i  ^
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  改进: Children should be taught discipline in order to avoid unnecessary loss. ) d* `( A# M2 h9 U5 j  p' ?5 o( y

. i# U2 n4 `6 F" `1 E  E  50. I felt alone. + S5 \1 y6 ^% _; D$ Y* H
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  改进: I felt lonely.
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发表于 2005-2-24 08:39 | 显示全部楼层
wow, where did you get those sample (the cheglish one)? I have to say the revised samples are really really good.
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* s9 K- ]: ~+ y) q( zThanks
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-2-26 07:02 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
平时的积累,呵呵!
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发表于 2005-2-26 14:03 | 显示全部楼层

顶!

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发表于 2005-3-1 08:25 | 显示全部楼层

很好。

能否解释一下 status quo 是什么意思。
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发表于 2005-3-1 08:37 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
是现状的意思
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发表于 2005-4-9 18:26 | 显示全部楼层
:lol::lol::lol:
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发表于 2005-4-9 20:42 | 显示全部楼层
Wow,看得我头晕目悬的...还是记不住...呵呵
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发表于 2005-4-9 21:09 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
有些改进似乎意思有些改变...
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发表于 2005-8-24 02:47 | 显示全部楼层
好哦.xiexie
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发表于 2005-8-24 19:48 | 显示全部楼层
thanks
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