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发表于 2005-2-24 07:24 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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  1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level. + W) F0 e! L$ x  m! k! @, h

) }8 T5 ~' X/ z5 \/ {, S) j) Z. H3 _  改进:Artists' work upgrades our civilization. ' C7 a1 x8 W0 F" A

7 v& b' s/ @+ F6 {4 c. J$ u  2. For example, you work in a big factory.
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6 K& M, Z7 H! e* M4 G/ {" p  改进: Suppose you work in a big factory.
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  3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job. 8 _; p0 j$ Y5 H1 |

1 b1 R+ C7 c2 R: l  改进:You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career. - E& P$ z* |& z3 a8 s
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  4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck.
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) y' p0 H& ]* n& Z$ j# R9 |  改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck. 7 b4 z$ Q9 @) K1 ~+ M

1 I3 W# l# x0 m7 o  5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level.
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  改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life.
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  6. Their brain is still very young.   J: z, \' I, A9 e" w* e
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  改进: They are still immature. 4 ~5 _3 h& @! s8 v

* u) `9 v' X% j+ d9 Z2 o- H8 B2 ^$ q  7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things. . P3 A+ b$ j; x5 f

4 [( z& V2 O: T  改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.
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  8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong. , l) W! ~( r2 @5 t9 N; o3 P9 G
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  改进: They cannot tell right from wrong. 3 x4 G- ?2 b0 i* n: [/ L

$ H8 \% h* a% j2 B6 M  9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time.
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+ ]' n" o3 F& L$ U$ ^, Z6 r4 |) G  改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time. 7 ^3 D$ A1 M5 Y; o/ [

! \, c( Z; I$ u& \* b  10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life.
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- E) T" I5 ?3 c& C8 a( L  改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it.
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- D) u7 t) h% ]; D, ?7 o  11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development. 7 i4 S6 U+ q' [6 [4 o2 n3 Y

. A( Q" x: K% P, x% n  改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development. - R6 y2 k' [' p& M; w
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  12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money.
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" x! \& S- y" p2 T  改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money. 5 Y* U1 ]9 L* [6 j

' z2 [. _* K# J1 C$ x  13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life. 3 I6 Q$ z) D' \, J/ M7 o5 _, X  U

% \2 x8 ]- q8 a* q2 Q  改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one.
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6 W! m3 D. ~! [. ~! j) Q  14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money.
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2 K% ^. g6 K/ }1 v- h: N3 L  改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more. 0 O( Q* v) J% r; T4 b  {
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  15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products.
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  改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products. 4 x7 X% t& M  i. o+ I
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  16. In order to suit the needs of entering into work, students must grasp some technical skills.
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8 ]8 E! r! o: Z9 I, i! `/ s& i- U  改进: In order to meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills.
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5 P6 l4 F8 `# h! ~  17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians.
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  改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand. 2 l  T! g4 X+ k
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  18. This knowledge will become a part of your body. / |  J! B6 o+ w" J1 a

: y* k+ t2 _$ E. A6 c! k$ q( ?  改进: This knowledge will become part of you.
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9 |( Z9 k# q# L* ^  [3 Q  19. They cannot think clearly.
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( H4 n) b9 K6 o  改进: They cannot think straight.
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% y2 r  r5 R7 f, [. F9 }2 c* A  F  20. Money can improve their living standard.
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( E+ E1 o$ v1 k: l! {% u% ^  改进: Money can improve their life.
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  21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money.
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$ }/ H2 |6 r2 J) x  改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money. 8 k* d5 i! K$ S* Z$ t- U

- _% X1 e; J! d9 Z+ @  W  22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life.
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  改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life. 0 D9 g2 i5 Y7 |+ i! w
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  23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later.
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, q6 V  t, h% c  改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn. 1 _  O" ^3 R# Y- k- M) d5 z
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  24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano.
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  改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes. ) ]! P& v: ~8 q1 y1 F7 e
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  25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion, I will study with others. * n+ q' l+ K' J
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  改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others. : u( d' L. p( @- y
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  26. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
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  改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal. , L9 U3 l2 C+ ^! i
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  27. Smoking can help you relax your mind.
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  改进: Cigarettes can help you relax.
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0 O5 V8 U, v4 F' V. A  28. What's about nonsmokers? ; |0 ?5 s. {+ m! D! v7 V, e( r" h
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  改进: What about nonsmokers? 0 S: A. v% `+ Y# s# S: d! I( j! H
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  29. Why not to be a non-smoker?
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  P! w) A0 c' k+ v9 ]5 [) g  改进: Why not be a non-smoker?
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  30. Everyone will have many friends in his life. , v( Z  p, f" k$ m# E0 @3 I# d9 Z" ?: X
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  改进: Everyone has friends in his life. & D. ^- p5 G+ c6 U
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  31. I am not good at maths, but English
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6 g' R9 z! }9 K# n! s7 V0 H. y' u  改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.
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  32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time? 9 B( }% L+ Z& K
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  改进: Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time? & ?) A. ?% q3 t9 q0 v; Q3 r

+ a% {2 b8 I$ J  33.It is children who clear about their interests.
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  改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests. & T) T5 l+ G4 E7 t" W
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  34. I agree the latter idea. ( }4 Z. ]4 J7 A
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  改进: I agree with the latter idea.
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  35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo.
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( o$ B# l. m- C5 q  p! C, I6 A  改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo. ( @  A7 ~% M! d- Y% w- ?

( Q' b. x! \; [. h3 s  36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.
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- i) u$ P5 ^* Y! [0 i; n- a) o  t  J  改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe. + t: c1 s9 \* Z; r- l; X4 J: p
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  37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are. 3 L1 _! Z# P) W3 h/ L
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  改进:People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.
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  38. No one knows all the things.
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4 u% m1 ~7 X5 f+ T  改进: No one knows everything.
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  w2 V& L- Y- G  39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life. + f- q$ X: x# [2 U/ d) b1 A# c

# V6 i9 K( W: w& w  改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
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  40. Each form of having friends has its advantages 7 F# Q8 U: k1 q# Y, G+ L' r! L8 h
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  改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages. 4 p$ o) G" p9 h6 o

7 V. A3 Z4 M- A3 Q3 Y  41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up. + N$ q, P2 [7 B+ a9 z% }' F8 d
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  改进: I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply
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3 r; i- ~# P* }, }  42. Luckily, he recognized an American professor.
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  改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor.
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7 k$ K  \5 t' K  43. They will learn the bad habits. % h7 Z4 M0 S" t
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  改进: They will develop bad habits. 2 j! C/ q( A$ `4 r
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  44. In this continued process, people make progress. 4 J3 s; y* y! R' A5 v5 ?
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  改进: In this cycle, people make progress.
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$ r- U2 s* \0 D& Q5 Q  45. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary.
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' i% {8 n6 |" W+ S/ O  改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary. , I# C9 I! h& `4 e+ j

/ V6 a4 g" F& M# S+ L  46. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency. ( U# a1 l5 `. b- F4 A

2 b: i) f" Z1 j8 S3 j9 D* c, o  改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings.
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9 L1 ]2 E5 c; f- y0 l2 A% J  47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact. ' w+ Q4 q. ~: H: @4 s4 c: L5 ]

$ V5 [5 x; V; Z2 ~5 z& a8 V( w3 |1 i  改进: A wrong decision will bring even worse result. ' @: \) X' Z/ C) y
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  48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing. 0 f+ n3 z+ `' q
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  改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream. . X4 C; W7 A$ ]* ]& P6 Y

  u: {( O( I% e" s2 k- I" F  49. Children should be taught disciplines in order to avoid unnecessary lost.
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: E2 j0 p: Z! H0 M9 I5 m: G4 r9 I  50. I felt alone.
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  改进: I felt lonely.
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发表于 2005-2-24 08:39 | 显示全部楼层
wow, where did you get those sample (the cheglish one)? I have to say the revised samples are really really good.
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-2-26 07:02 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
平时的积累,呵呵!
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发表于 2005-2-26 14:03 | 显示全部楼层

顶!

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发表于 2005-3-1 08:25 | 显示全部楼层

很好。

能否解释一下 status quo 是什么意思。
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发表于 2005-3-1 08:37 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
是现状的意思
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发表于 2005-4-9 18:26 | 显示全部楼层
:lol::lol::lol:
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老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
Wow,看得我头晕目悬的...还是记不住...呵呵
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发表于 2005-4-9 21:09 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
有些改进似乎意思有些改变...
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发表于 2005-8-24 02:47 | 显示全部楼层
好哦.xiexie
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发表于 2005-8-24 19:48 | 显示全部楼层
thanks
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