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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart
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From sunset til dawn/ _. z- y1 T) `3 x6 p
Through darkness to light$ _  a, w( c8 h! p, t
Nourished with my soul9 H" C/ f4 L1 Y7 Y, k
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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5 T$ K/ ]. `( ?+ Z5 uIn the memory of my life
& q# O1 a' J+ F1 K: A+ DYou planted a dream, _( p2 ?$ {: e" H  T/ j
Should the sky fall down on me3 j1 T1 \; f# j3 y/ J
May promises fade in the sea# z# a' W' `9 S9 {) h" A
Sewing back every broken pieces
& S% }) J" J0 `+ J, aBursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表- q& }1 ]" m% ]/ @3 L
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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3 S% g- p) z7 D7 x' e1 S( o* @In the garden of my heart- S! O' c7 r6 ^8 _
You planted a tree' J6 {0 v4 e3 B! w
From sunset til dawn  K9 G) ~: z: O
Through darkness to light  r: |0 s* J+ M8 s- m9 k3 |4 ^
Nourished with my soul
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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?4 c$ H3 ^. g1 N* `

* c$ {1 C! I! ~. |写得真好。( }, Q2 y+ X, O; U* h" }0 V5 B: ~3 x8 A

& ?9 a% y6 U1 G- B加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
* \* D  g+ h+ E3 f眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?8 w7 Y. b/ O9 H1 `$ q
写得真好。( l- I: p$ c) g1 U' T
加精加精!

( S% ?+ y, I. \! B2 T2 H' G我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表4 W+ T1 c/ q% T; A  A, O
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

* K- P# _# J, G# L$ R% B五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.4 r4 U1 Z: {% Y
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表5 k1 f0 B7 X  C% P
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.0 O+ g6 d8 f  F2 e2 y$ p
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.3 T7 |+ e2 T- k5 c

, ~- N  c# f1 _! y" l& I$ @1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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" I3 b9 t! i+ [; Z; ~& M, j5 M  RShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表8 \. g- z2 G; O1 v4 O  i2 \
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。( R8 Q' H: x0 y6 O2 |) C1 y6 W
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
+ b* b6 {/ ?: d& r4 qthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。5 h# [5 b9 n7 W2 a& N

9 X$ r8 u6 w9 w, \, f+ ]' ^+ \Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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1 j1 `6 f, Q* s" T8 [  B有啊,有很多经典的例子。% t% {, u3 k" w. \. _
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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For I am not there,
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To dance on the air.
0 c: L9 _& B) N, BIf I'm missed, find a flower," W2 ?- c$ {$ k6 |+ ?
I'll be there too,) T0 `5 h& _+ O5 T
Sniffing it's fragrance
5 P: ^( s. w2 y2 m. M; KRight next to you.4 w7 W5 k2 v3 c8 Y9 P1 b$ B# O
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Don't be sad
" L. ]! K. F6 B' p0 JWhen you remember me,
2 f. H: g' M3 j1 w! [For I'm singing in the sunshine,
8 A* k8 |6 F" a) Z3 SWild and free,
3 b4 P3 I( w% \4 AFlirting with the lighting,; A: Q# {; \2 A7 H
Playing tag with the wind,/ L4 q1 M9 J% }- D; U
Chasing the thunder
/ B$ B! A0 K* @1 u- D. t3 o/ ETime and again,6 a  \- ^, h7 X5 h- A
Soaring with the eagle,
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5 @4 O8 T  z( ^/ iEnjoying all of nature. O  ~) C3 e2 X# x: U% S" b
While I'm waiting for thee.
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