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  1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level.
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- W( x+ [  _8 g( I) [  改进:Artists' work upgrades our civilization.
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' d4 T8 h& v5 t7 N3 y  2. For example, you work in a big factory.
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, ~' S, ?6 u- B& ?! [  改进: Suppose you work in a big factory. 6 }2 h! l2 b, y# C# n

" L  t% l9 n) ?  3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job.
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, s( W' x6 N4 k; a; ?0 r  改进:You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.
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  4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck.
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  改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck. : \; _( P! _8 |6 r6 S8 |8 k) f" Q

+ e$ p- K+ X$ `: q" R$ P% W+ d  5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level. 5 V8 q- ~2 a. B6 K

4 U% i6 k) q/ e7 Q. l5 a- E" P  改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life. ! E: j# z/ M9 P  M% U" [
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  6. Their brain is still very young.
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  改进: They are still immature.
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  7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things. 4 l8 j+ A4 |" ^+ h8 P6 O. d9 m

. s' \/ U8 w  t  B1 q* h: S  改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.
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  8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.
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  改进: They cannot tell right from wrong. / B0 U$ j2 v7 ?" v
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  9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time. + m& K! B; @/ m) ^( f1 A! A

; b5 t  v' }  q( H  改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time.   s* X- _# N4 r; B5 |
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  10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life. 6 V/ R4 J+ ^0 |7 I$ X0 q/ t- x) r
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  改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it. - X$ u( u, c7 {2 G5 K
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  11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development.
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  改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development. . u0 ~) X. J/ `( @- j% [5 H

4 i+ {3 Y4 ]! {1 z3 D9 y. o; i+ k  12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money. 2 o3 v) V  j: p# b2 h! k. K( f

4 W+ N  c2 \! |; H' c  改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money. & Y" K4 w( {5 V/ P8 o

& f1 Z9 h) X' G/ f) S  13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life. ) r$ _0 g6 \" ?( a  B# I
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  改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one. / _! I  b, @! y/ {  d

! n/ s! G5 ]' M* M% O/ h% j& X) Z  14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money. $ l$ n4 @( P& a: h3 P: u* q
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  改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more. - k9 k& X  A' j* `, x7 ?, P
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  15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products. ) F7 }6 }# I, q- ^  z9 ]

% f' v5 k, m! ?8 g  改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products.
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  16. In order to suit the needs of entering into work, students must grasp some technical skills.
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  改进: In order to meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills.
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  17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians.
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  改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand. + l" I& s1 v, ~2 ^

' x0 f1 p& a4 t7 ?4 ?  18. This knowledge will become a part of your body.   ~) I# k. x9 r: F! e2 T- ~% q
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  改进: This knowledge will become part of you. 1 [$ |/ ?0 s/ y
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  19. They cannot think clearly. ; j: I$ n" C* C2 p0 z
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/ i) D3 y: _: H6 C2 A* M  20. Money can improve their living standard.
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$ N8 L& F1 G5 M4 O3 k  改进: Money can improve their life. 5 [0 N+ j" J( I) {2 E. `
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  21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money. * g, m0 N9 n6 m' I5 ]+ g4 j. r. ~1 J
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  改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money.
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, Q/ B! R" s) q# W  22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life. - V. U+ j' p1 X  _# K0 Z

) o( Q' j5 s$ q1 m, k  改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life. 3 F9 i, z* H  h- J8 q# c8 c
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  23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later.
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  改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn. 3 f) |, m( C. J' r* ]

. E3 t8 M5 H/ W+ ^% u! J  24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano. . ]- ]7 F, E8 o0 f3 ]8 j0 _
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  改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes. . W( J2 U$ c5 \9 P" Q

: W5 a2 x  x+ s" Q  25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion, I will study with others. + p# t- W; v) G& z
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  改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others.
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  26. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
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  改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal.
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  27. Smoking can help you relax your mind.
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) p0 q- G; c& p0 F$ E8 V0 J2 _  改进: Cigarettes can help you relax.
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  28. What's about nonsmokers?
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/ \: U- C7 h! N0 s2 `  29. Why not to be a non-smoker? . F/ e2 Z+ D. ?3 _  q
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  改进: Why not be a non-smoker? . l8 `) u) u8 J8 V3 `# X. g
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  30. Everyone will have many friends in his life. % R; U1 \& o1 t: L
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  改进: Everyone has friends in his life. $ ]$ E: w5 R+ O

( k, d7 Z% [+ G# \  31. I am not good at maths, but English
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6 [- X9 h' s) s* `% d  改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English. " V* o# w+ Q. ]

$ f( ~9 g1 E, |" {' U4 e* ]4 N  32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time? 5 S/ e8 }  b, ~8 n7 q' b
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  改进: Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time?
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( L4 B- n7 `7 s  33.It is children who clear about their interests. 7 }' i; O6 v+ S
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  改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.
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4 `: ?2 y6 [& U& R1 F  34. I agree the latter idea.
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# Y  ?% @! T( z8 i; _& A+ X1 p9 p  改进: I agree with the latter idea. ; H2 P  d; l' ~& A6 }
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  35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo. . @! Z& F% l, O& ]8 S6 L6 j. `
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  改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
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  36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now. $ w( p( y5 X2 r# f' {

: f( V0 R% i5 S3 g, f  改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe. ( b2 F* d3 T' R6 z9 _; c
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  37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.
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  改进:People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn. ( u0 b7 H/ M! S' H0 h( I
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  38. No one knows all the things.
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. z# y) C6 L) J2 ^% ]1 \  39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.
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  改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life. / a) d; m6 ~- ~) R3 L

$ [& N7 o" @5 I  40. Each form of having friends has its advantages 4 ^4 D1 A5 |+ L6 Q; Q

! M7 }+ k( b0 @/ t9 A  改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages. 2 ]. k$ V6 _- l! u% Z; V. j9 ^& X
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  41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up. 2 t# s5 k# k0 _# m
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  改进: I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply 2 K* p, h$ B8 R% @  e- b
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  42. Luckily, he recognized an American professor.
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  改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor. 3 c( k$ s; D2 H

5 b% `' y2 |. f! t3 _3 G6 O  43. They will learn the bad habits.
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  改进: They will develop bad habits.
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9 p) w3 o: V& C! y  44. In this continued process, people make progress. : x- i: i. p- }- a

- G$ F' c1 ?5 z5 B' o  改进: In this cycle, people make progress.
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  45. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary. ( p. \% E6 N7 k4 j/ O) B1 W/ b$ M

9 X# J0 k( v4 q+ B! b  改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary. - a8 _! T# u* c& I( J# H2 f$ N
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  46. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency. - q$ a- _( a# G# |$ t
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  改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings. 1 |' _" J- x2 r
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  47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact. 9 X$ X% o7 z: k6 g

) R: O/ G  a/ _' b& z2 m  改进: A wrong decision will bring even worse result.
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  48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing.
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  改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream. ' Y1 D8 q! Y$ `0 {. a3 F6 d+ _
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  49. Children should be taught disciplines in order to avoid unnecessary lost. . l8 G1 r! Q% L1 n2 q5 x( s4 @
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  改进: Children should be taught discipline in order to avoid unnecessary loss.
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+ f( o& K! q: z+ V- S. ^; B  50. I felt alone. & b& M2 o8 u. z$ I0 @$ R4 @

0 i% Q4 W! \6 z& i2 r- G- {  改进: I felt lonely.
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发表于 2005-2-24 08:39 | 显示全部楼层
wow, where did you get those sample (the cheglish one)? I have to say the revised samples are really really good.
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-2-26 07:02 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
平时的积累,呵呵!
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发表于 2005-2-26 14:03 | 显示全部楼层

顶!

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发表于 2005-3-1 08:25 | 显示全部楼层

很好。

能否解释一下 status quo 是什么意思。
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发表于 2005-3-1 08:37 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
是现状的意思
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发表于 2005-4-9 18:26 | 显示全部楼层
:lol::lol::lol:
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发表于 2005-4-9 20:42 | 显示全部楼层
Wow,看得我头晕目悬的...还是记不住...呵呵
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发表于 2005-4-9 21:09 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
有些改进似乎意思有些改变...
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发表于 2005-8-24 02:47 | 显示全部楼层
好哦.xiexie
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发表于 2005-8-24 19:48 | 显示全部楼层
thanks
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