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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!8 B" B" I9 t" S% `- S1 s

& U  U- H- |2 @2 \In the garden of my heart7 A& w/ t0 Z8 Z" y: Z
You planted a tree6 i1 o" g% R; z
From sunset til dawn5 {# {3 I! T, X
Through darkness to light
* w& N$ D. |, B5 `8 O! VNourished with my soul
0 z9 d. j. J" ?2 T: @( a" x: aDevoured my sorrow by thee# e0 N, y& z, s; B4 a4 D" X$ L, r
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In the memory of my life" [6 f" ]3 ^9 b' |! b
You planted a dream4 I4 f9 d: Z9 z& \' ?) ?
Should the sky fall down on me
! }! h; ?  X/ Q: M( fMay promises fade in the sea9 o. v- K; M( N' B" u
Sewing back every broken pieces5 I& s- _0 p5 x; P. K1 P
Bursting the love out of me# H) V  o$ i# [5 o0 R% ^8 d# o

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表, X% Q1 Y* y' K. v
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!$ ]1 ?( Q4 L4 R+ L# |, j& |5 p
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In the garden of my heart
% \5 v7 L' Z( h0 `3 e- iYou planted a tree# I3 n  Z. Z( ?; d+ y$ d
From sunset til dawn# T5 y6 V/ H: V) d4 P! G8 X6 v9 c& P
Through darkness to light) _; h- e* g+ O. y! r
Nourished with my soul
3 ]! |4 C1 p1 _1 gDevoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?' z$ Q$ |8 k: C1 H4 L+ J& n" K
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写得真好。4 h3 f6 L  @" m: k, c; J

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
3 D4 @' l/ Y. F3 Y眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?9 v" I& J% O, H5 f! _; ]
写得真好。
1 H% B) e5 T; h9 s8 q8 g加精加精!

& v. @/ U, \8 h9 i7 r" D我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
8 I) X% ]+ {5 P- \/ l如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表2 {- K; f. z- N2 r
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.; K7 v$ V$ Y4 _* H( c& S
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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! O) U5 G+ `/ x. W1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
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红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。- e7 C& L- [. ?# L/ F' a  W
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
5 q" r7 t9 {/ V, C' Y  q9 R0 ~0 [thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。4 ^/ |7 d( k& J) i' w

! v) t) n& Y- o: N/ S7 uShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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1 t( k( x& t% r$ j8 r诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表, ~& y) Z4 X3 T8 ]9 H: ?$ T
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。9 m- S- \5 t) W7 \$ _

- K0 S2 q, ~+ G& _% Z: X& p" }Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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有啊,有很多经典的例子。. l8 ?. i1 E8 R# x. P' {
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》0 S1 g3 B0 T. v& W
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Don't weep at my grave' p0 F# R6 Z6 e% o
For I am not there,
8 w$ V& A" a+ T+ [( e9 RI've a date with a butterfly
5 Y$ s1 n3 v5 R# J: bTo dance on the air.
" u: A' y( H0 E9 \0 d& z7 w/ P1 C0 qIf I'm missed, find a flower,
* b8 H* g5 e: C. K  e; lI'll be there too,
8 d9 H" \  S; K8 c1 L; {Sniffing it's fragrance
8 x, Q8 u- Z6 b" Q6 h! [Right next to you.
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- `7 j9 r/ p4 W0 b4 V! pDon't be sad% i( F& @5 L" g. S  r8 Z2 h
When you remember me,5 a) v1 }+ M. E; X9 Z# ]% _3 K
For I'm singing in the sunshine,2 `6 {+ Z' g/ `, R
Wild and free,
" A5 o7 y, Y5 z; l8 w: bFlirting with the lighting,/ U+ @2 m# |! C+ O1 k6 I$ w* R6 ~
Playing tag with the wind,8 f% m+ {3 s# `! I5 y' l8 C1 n
Chasing the thunder: _5 W7 C: z5 a. T
Time and again,0 s+ o& Q/ v( ~
Soaring with the eagle,
* G" ^- _* _+ YSwimming in the sea," L" r( f( g5 z8 f  ]
Enjoying all of nature
6 z& r* I' ~2 t- S9 YWhile I'm waiting for thee.
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