In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
6 u( L* ?1 a8 |; J! i2 }4 CFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
# ]) h8 X) M0 s( h! P, ODevoured my sorrow by thee

9 y2 @1 F$ j) X) ~9 lIn the memory of my life
9 M0 V2 D8 S2 X" X# N  N4 \You planted a dream
5 m8 P% w) _0 Q/ f; u2 OShould the sky fall down on me
6 ]- r4 F  p- [4 j7 V* YMay promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

9 r  I4 o( U( `7 t) O2 R3 tIn the garden of my heart
! |9 E! H; k2 N( X, J2 hYou planted a tree
% @6 T2 J2 X8 yFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
' s5 Z2 S, u) w# G" `0 qNourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

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4 C+ K- ?! R) v4 Z3 O& g* T/ C' X. t眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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" f/ e, I! D* U& N写得真好。
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$ _) S  a9 k; X/ O' }* N2 i加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
; f. z+ h; d8 M' w眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
: M2 U+ F/ M. O+ ?0 [加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
' R1 e2 D4 t; x6 N* b- Q3 lShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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  o. ~8 p) z) N7 gThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.

1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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" M0 |% q& I# @* t9 `2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

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五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
& \! D1 }2 \% b# K% cthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

) c0 H% b& `7 I7 ?诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
6 ]& S  K- X. W" {, T. x% a; m) zthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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" Z8 G7 O( m) F" F: B有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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6 ?' g- P1 s/ }% N比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

; F8 V& L8 n5 {" @9 oDon't weep at my grave
# S: z9 t( }1 `; N& \( i& v) nFor I am not there,
" g6 @5 h  s  S' h# mI've a date with a butterfly
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If I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
$ n+ T. J2 D/ o5 I3 z" D- g+ rRight next to you.
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- g: q+ W% P# @7 H2 C6 K- H* XDon't be sad
) }) o. k! h3 c0 XWhen you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
# H6 B6 g7 V: G5 @# qFlirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
/ A* G' v3 w5 P% d! w6 `& tChasing the thunder
Time and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
  c" `' Q( @0 _6 [) n9 |8 cEnjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.