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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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3 `' l, W9 `/ L* m& MIn the garden of my heart; @  J- b2 j. I( V
You planted a tree
' H6 n/ p- a% b1 h! r0 hFrom sunset til dawn
  G# O! {. z9 V& T3 rThrough darkness to light4 `) l( I; g; t
Nourished with my soul
8 Q* A1 X( x. a1 u% GDevoured my sorrow by thee
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/ A/ H+ F3 d: cIn the memory of my life
) O. O* @1 Z/ g: k# nYou planted a dream1 t+ U% Q: C+ z5 k
Should the sky fall down on me
1 y6 b+ S7 l  e6 ]4 d: `- x  YMay promises fade in the sea0 n' ?! Z- o/ @/ e, R1 L3 v( o
Sewing back every broken pieces' ?- q& V+ a, [6 H& I' |
Bursting the love out of me2 u0 r  ^7 i2 W; W7 W

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表9 ?* }7 I: x# t0 P
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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6 Y" O( [; m4 d: F) WIn the garden of my heart  {' m) L) U7 O
You planted a tree
: c3 k4 m+ v3 N/ l5 t5 zFrom sunset til dawn. \4 H+ `0 N( v3 _1 J' c% h
Through darkness to light4 P' U7 k; O3 \' G6 l9 ~% A
Nourished with my soul8 X; g4 v( B+ V
Devoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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写得真好。& N$ K) J. O' |" \* k( J: i2 h
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加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
2 \" [3 H& b/ x7 B眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?7 n+ ~7 \) f& o; `6 H
写得真好。
" M) G: P8 ~9 A' |5 |加精加精!
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
5 V* t8 _6 @" F. `7 U  X如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

' [" t7 S: m: Y3 J1 h+ q1 y7 p; u五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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) J3 g8 t2 v& C0 L0 K2 S) xSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表9 J% A& @9 z# S9 K( ~
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.4 r$ _! \2 ?3 D3 X2 c: ?8 c

. U) B3 y- b  G0 g& }Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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9 F( @2 k1 u- O/ c. [) W8 K8 QThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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5 e  h) p, N( Z9 r2 n5 h' s1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".0 n' p, L/ v1 a
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
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红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表9 g9 Q. g6 H, c$ h: A) |
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。/ g8 t1 }/ b: l* u* E# a+ {8 `4 s
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
; ]# W2 c# e8 H% qthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。( e6 T7 ?" l$ y  H* q

( L: s+ K5 [% |8 d' gShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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有啊,有很多经典的例子。# S; W6 Q0 e! w, j) N4 ?3 s1 X
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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- `" b: _0 J1 o' Q( WDon't weep at my grave
. S: y2 O9 Z. m+ _: l( Z; D3 D! mFor I am not there,% o0 x4 ]- x% X3 L
I've a date with a butterfly
* b8 l! A( u$ @) lTo dance on the air.
+ e2 ?' m8 c- N6 x% X4 f7 X" g4 ~If I'm missed, find a flower,
; ~( v8 q1 F9 e6 f  t5 m/ y& `& cI'll be there too,- p6 A7 m% P1 `$ F: E( x
Sniffing it's fragrance
3 ^" Y& ~' ]1 G% p" yRight next to you.
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Don't be sad
3 i! q# c5 }+ [When you remember me,: q' q1 U+ E" I0 a
For I'm singing in the sunshine,3 r3 z, ?/ V( c: @
Wild and free,3 H2 f( {" g  m4 b' H. \
Flirting with the lighting,9 a* Q, M1 ~; D# b
Playing tag with the wind,7 v: P* e  x6 w" h* V
Chasing the thunder
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Soaring with the eagle,; U7 K) }: g2 N% M+ a! V( H
Swimming in the sea,$ z5 _* `, V) p
Enjoying all of nature
/ g" B6 e3 K9 v3 x6 Q! V  U; Z# oWhile I'm waiting for thee.
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